Kiss Newford is your ordinary average girl….. Well except for the part where she has the ability to change colors…………….And her Goth or homicidal (As kiss likes to call it) boyfriend.
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I think you over plot, you introduce too much plot twist to early. You talk about her and boyfriends drama, her eye color, and etc. Just start out with the most interesting thing..her eye colors..then in the next chapter start talking about that along with everything else.
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