Fighting Darkness

Fighting Darkness

21.1K Reads 579 Votes 25 Part Story
Kennedy By KennedyCameron Completed

Paige Rogers lived a "normal" life. Her dad was killed in war, and mom never to be seen again. Grandma B is forced to take care of the nagging child. As Paige grows up, she finds herself in a abusive relationship, not knowing which way to turn. When she goes to the local park one night trying to take her life, an unknown boy comes and takes her under his wing. Now as her life goes on she has to choose between the relationship or the stranger, but what if it all ended?

This sounds like a really interesting book so far! You write in a way that really grabs my attention.
KennedyCameron KennedyCameron Jul 24, 2013
@thepigs
                              Yeah! I know what you mean! But I feel readers will get confused if I part it out discribing her. :/
little_lottie little_lottie Jul 24, 2013
I like it so far! Sapphire is a little mean though, and full of herself. Sure she might be pretty and all, but that doesn't mean she has to rub it in her face. But great start though!
nkf350 nkf350 Jul 15, 2013
I was a bit confused when she was with her "friend" and they were talking... But, otherwise!!! It was uber intense and I find that I want to get to know this Derek creep and how she's forced to date him o.O I hate her "friend"... She's an absolute bitch hahaha voted!
thepigs thepigs Jul 03, 2013
good start! i would recommend adding the description of paige little by little rather than have a paragraph all at once because it sounds a little forced, you know? you did a good job getting the reader's attention from the start though :D
eggzz00 eggzz00 Jul 03, 2013
Awesome writing flow and I love the way you write. Great job!