The ToyMakers Volume 1

The ToyMakers Volume 1

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Mythology Queen By butterballporkbun Completed

(FEATURED STORY)

We play with Toys,
We love Toys,
We kill with Toys,
We are The ToyMakers.

Gabi_100 Gabi_100 Jul 07, 2016
not scared not scared 😅😰
                              u made it really well ..... best wishes
The_Iron_Queen The_Iron_Queen Aug 11, 2016
How about instead of "But I was not..." To "So I wasn't shocked..."
The_Iron_Queen The_Iron_Queen Aug 11, 2016
I think there is suppose to be a comma separating "snowing" and "I", like " snowing, I "
The_Iron_Queen The_Iron_Queen Aug 11, 2016
I don't think the comma in-between "Everyone" and "needs" needs to be there, it's like a random pause, but you can leave it there if you want
HowlingSkyline HowlingSkyline Dec 26, 2016
Wait does the trailer only go with the book, or is it also an anime or animes??? Cuz it looks AWESOME and I can't read anything but English and a little french. Lol.
The_Iron_Queen The_Iron_Queen Aug 11, 2016
I think it would be better if you delete the "As" in the beginning of the sentence and just start it with "She smiled.." Because having it there would be a little confusing and a bit repetitive. But you can leave it there if you want.