We play with Toys,
We love Toys,
We kill with Toys,
We are The ToyMakers.
not scared not scared 😅😰
u made it really well ..... best wishes
How about instead of "But I was not..." To "So I wasn't shocked..."
I think there is suppose to be a comma separating "snowing" and "I", like " snowing, I "
I don't think the comma in-between "Everyone" and "needs" needs to be there, it's like a random pause, but you can leave it there if you want
I think it would be better if you delete the "As" in the beginning of the sentence and just start it with "She smiled.." Because having it there would be a little confusing and a bit repetitive. But you can leave it there if you want.
I saw these anime photos in each chapter and i liked it. I wondered if their is an anime based on your story or this concept.