The Mafia's Lost Daughter

The Mafia's Lost Daughter

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Melanie Prett By littleuglyalien Updated 7 days ago

Read the book to find out more about Tyler Fernandez's life.

I don't think 'captivated' is the right word. You might need to fix that.
                              
                              -no hate.
may be not mabe that is like saying i may or may not be held captive
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i agree with the not using "captivated," it would be better to say held captive captivated is more of a word i would use in saying interested in a book or movie.
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John_beaver John_beaver Oct 20
Great chapter, the mafia's stories are the best! congrats for your style, I enjoyed!