WOM - it almost sounds like worm, but it actually means "Wattpad Official Meany". I read two FULL chapters of your story, leave a comment and vote on each, write a summary of my critique/review, and interview you! I sound harsh. But, seriously, how would you get better if no one ever told you your dialogue sucks? NB: In no way am I saying that your description and or dialogue suck. I am merely using it as a humorous illustration. No offence, puns, Trade Mark violations, or any of that other jazz intended.
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