I Won't Tell if You Don't

I Won't Tell if You Don't

864 Reads 30 Votes 4 Part Story
Ro-Ro-A By Ro-Ro-A Updated Nov 24, 2011

Daphne Woods wasn't popular but when she finally gets the chance that she's always wanted will she take it? and what will it cost her?

cupcakesss cupcakesss Jul 09, 2012
good girl :)- its good at the moment - but I bet it could be GREAT! :)
SolsticeOfWinter SolsticeOfWinter Nov 25, 2011
It's good. But you should rephrase those plain sentences. Use descriptive details to really hook your readers.
HanaeKohana HanaeKohana Aug 31, 2011
AWESOME STORY! i love it! oted all chapters, and became your fan^^
vintagebellagirl vintagebellagirl Aug 31, 2011
It's a great start, I liked how you used a diary introduction but it gets a little confusing when you go from Diary start to third person of one character's pov to anothers. other then that it's a great effort and read. : )
realityxfantasy realityxfantasy Aug 14, 2011
Please capitalize your I's (i) and add more details. It makes your story a lot better. I thought this had potential to become a really great story, so just edit it and add some details, fix your grammar, and make it longer. Pretty decent start :)
AshleighWoodbridge AshleighWoodbridge Aug 12, 2011
Well, this is a great beginning. A firm plot and good description. Though I'd put a bit less Point of Views. Anyways, I really enjoyed reading this, so i voted fanned and liked (I was the first like!) Keep writing! =D