Executioner's Daughter

Executioner's Daughter

6 Part Story 676 Reads 6 Votes
Danielle Barnett By Moonshine35 Updated Sep 11, 2011

Most Rhoecian children lookup to knights and legends of old but fifteen year old Hans, with his strong sense of justice and open empathy, admires the warriors that the citizens deem as cursed, the peace-keepers called Executioners, particularly the high-ranking member nicknamed Bellona the War Goddess.
    Though far from being bloodthirsty, Hans is ecstatic when he is assigned as his hero's apprentice but will soon find out what about his country of Rhoez and heroes have been hidden from his sheltered life.
    The number one rule about being an Executioner: take no prisoners...just their heads.

Braveluck Braveluck Sep 12, 2011 02:52PM
Your writing is full of vivid details. I see it all, and you switch between current action and memories flawlessly.
Moonshine35 Moonshine35 Sep 12, 2011 01:55AM
@sftbllplus... (no disrespect, call it a nickname)
                                    
                                    I'm happy that you read it even if it isn't your thing.
                                    I know it needs polishing and I worry that I might be taking long to get to the meat but thanks for at least tasting it.
Moonshine35 Moonshine35 Sep 11, 2011 03:50AM
@nightmair67 (who else? hee hee)
                                    
                                    XD Thanks! I really appreciate you commenting
nightmair67 nightmair67 Sep 11, 2011 03:17AM
Wow I am really enjoying this, which is great considering I'm not big into fantasy style works. You are doing a great job of keeping the energy up throughout the story, and I like how you string your dialogues together! This is interesting and your a pretty darn good writer! :)
AquaFay AquaFay Sep 11, 2011 01:33AM
I love this story!!! It's amazing and mysterious and I love your wording. Can't wait for more!!!
Moonshine35 Moonshine35 Aug 13, 2011 08:57PM
Thanks for commenting! Yay, my first reviewer. But "in absentia" is an actual phrase.