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Father

Father

295K Reads 5.8K Votes 20 Part Story
Kelsey Turcotte By kc1tubbol Completed

Father has forty children, but they aren't his children. They are his prisoners. They must call him father. VIvien Love has been prisoner here for two years now and wants out of the hell they live in just like evryone else, but when Father 'falls in love' with her more serious consequences emerge. She now believes she will be able to escape and rescue everyone, but what of Father has turly fallen in love with her? Will she lie to save her life? Or will they all die trying?

I think the concept is good, just the structure, grammar, punctuation, spelling and language could be improved
XxLegoMaster2715xX XxLegoMaster2715xX Aug 29, 2016
So there is 40 of you? 30 girls and 10 guys? Why can't you take on a old man? 😑😑😑😑😑
sarahbishh sarahbishh Apr 11, 2016
The boys all WHORE the same thing. 😂😂😂😂 Please don't fix it.
diddyblakes diddyblakes Jul 19, 2016
i'm bummed out because i had a nightmare VERY similar to this and I wanted to write it haha :) but now I can read this one
Asanda_Mahlangu Asanda_Mahlangu Apr 18, 2016
Nice book except the names aren't really....unique. They're common names you find in any fanfic
XxLegoMaster2715xX XxLegoMaster2715xX Aug 29, 2016
So there is 40 of you? 30 girls and 10 guys? Why can't you take on a old man? 😑😑😑😑😑