Second Hand Wedding.

Second Hand Wedding.

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Mary Fahey By MaryFahey Completed

Teacher Chloe's engagement has ended two months before her wedding. To recycle her stylish event, she proposes to the hunk she jilted twice for eccentric behaviour!  
  
Vintage car expert Silas accepts. He plans to hide his shameful diagnosis until after his second hand wedding. With his business success, this time he will show Chloe he's more than her match.

patito_ail patito_ail Jan 30
I've never felt so attached to characters in a first chapter! It's really really good
Very cute pitch I love vintage things myself so this grabbed my attention
I can relate to her! I know about cars my father collects them long story lol my mother was a school teacher for years this kind of reminds me of my patents in ways ;)
aw, I really like the concept and I really feel for Silas.
                              
                              some of the time jumps (?) are a bit confusing though. like they're at the garage, then on the beach, and he has time to get a ring? and then the flashback to the past. maybe put some kind of divider in to help break up scenes?
HopeWelsh HopeWelsh Sep 19, 2015
Same thoughts as the other two regarding the brother. Whose brother?  Also, the last line might be stronger with 'a second hand wedding, like a second hand car, is only road-worthy with love. (To keep with the title of your piece.  Vintage car just didn't seem to work.
therandomword therandomword Sep 14, 2015
I really liked this. I was so upset for Silas. I kinda know someone very much like him. 
                              This has a certain "feel" to it, like women's fiction, which is good. And the conflicts are very well drawn. Great start.