Mr. Scyndarella: Tale Of Deception

Mr. Scyndarella: Tale Of Deception

393 Reads 70 Votes 8 Part Story
Kris with a 'K' By Living_Tribunal Updated Jul 30, 2017

Jace Parker had everything a teen could want- a loving family and riches to match. It all changes when his parents die in a tragic car accident and he is forced to live with his sister he never met and he is forced to be her family's personal servant. But life is not what it seems; secrets begin to unravel and he begins to uncover the truth about his new family. 
Can he expose the snakes in the grass and find out what really happened that tragic night? Who can he trust....?
Cover made by: @sabrinachick44

  • betrayal
  • cinderella
  • city
  • family
  • mystery
  • redemption
  • revenge
  • school
  • teen
ProxyInc ProxyInc Aug 26, 2017
His cousin's age seems a bit random. Unless it's vital to the plot you could probably cut it without it being missed.
ProxyInc ProxyInc Aug 26, 2017
I love seeing this. Its always great to hear of supportive parents💕
MissyofDark MissyofDark Jul 17, 2017
This is a really strong first chapter. I like your writing structure alot!
Cavalcade_Of_Clowns Cavalcade_Of_Clowns Nov 29, 2017
I look forward to getting stuck into this some time tomorrow. Got my mum here over the weekend so going to bring my read forward ^^ 
                              
                              Hope I still think this is a really good read! haha ( of course I will, poor Jace! )
CierRyland CierRyland Jan 25
I like the name Jace- Also, 'was' can be too telly. Just jump right into saying 'the scent of antiseptic that choked him with every breath' instead of 'was choking him'
Living_Tribunal Living_Tribunal Aug 26, 2017
Thank you for the comment. I'm not great at writing action so hence the start in that way.  I appreciate the feedback and I'll work on it. Thanks again xD