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Final Frontier Online

Final Frontier Online

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Epope2322 By Epope2322 Updated Jul 05

I slid the box off of my new VR headset. Everyone and there brother had one of these, but due to my lack of interest and financial problems I had only recently purchased mine. Virtual reality was created by an American company by the name of Reality inc. in the early 2030's. Since the company was quite small and their project was highly classified when the mark 1 hit the market everyone was surprised. It's original purpose was to train troops by immersing them in a world where they can train without using real weapons which can be costly, but the major video game company's saw its potential. Games that would let the player be fully immersed, worlds for pillaging or saving the possibility a were almost endless. In 2037 the very first virtual reality game was released, on the first day alone it sold over 10 million copies, and since it was the norm for games to be Virtual reality. Almost 2 years later the media cooled down until last month when the creators of the soon to be released game Final Frontier online announced that they would have a 10 million dollar reward to the person or guild that completed the game first. So everyone rushed to get a copy in the hopes of winning the reward.

I like this. I think the dialogue needs some work, and definitely some editing, however, the overall story has me hooked. Maybe consider giving my LitRPG a read and tell me what you think.
Otaku_Rexceed Otaku_Rexceed Mar 15, 2016
A little rushed, slow down go deeper into his thoughts, then the reader can enjoy the story instead of watching it pass by
Otaku_Rexceed Otaku_Rexceed Mar 15, 2016
Um the Doctor is going to cut him off before he completes the game unless he does it in a week
Artikuno Artikuno Apr 21, 2016
It's rushed, no idea if it's your plan to do that but readers often appreciate less rushed stories. There's some grammar mistakes and so on.
                              Anyway, did you know that there's a piece of music called Final Frontier, made by Thomas Bergerson? It's really amazing.
KarineMazouzi KarineMazouzi Jul 22, 2016
I like how he got the game, normally its always a lottery or a price