protective parents

protective parents

34.8K Reads 1.1K Votes 31 Part Story
let your spirit run free By horrocks Updated Aug 28

anakin and padma always saw ahsoka as a daughter and obi won saw her as a neice so what happens when she is kidnapped and tortured?

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Coco-Da-Me Coco-Da-Me Nov 18
It was pretty good, but please don't make everything in one sentence, because it makes the story much harder to read. Apart from that and that you spelled names with small letters, it was fine.
Dia_Mfaith Dia_Mfaith Apr 06
stop being rude guys!! This is a really good book, dont tell her to add punctuation and longer chaoters, not cool:/
You should add little dots at the end of your thoughts and when people speak.<-
YouPunyHumans YouPunyHumans Nov 18, 2016
Good plot, thought you need to make sure to add punctuation.
WinterWolf561 WinterWolf561 Nov 24, 2015
You really need to look at your sentences.  There were non. It was a single sentence less text.  I like the plot though