A story about a girl who's fate is sealed within the arms of a vampire that has caught her. The clock is ticking away although time seems to stand still,Will she be drained of her blood to the last drop? Will they fall in love on time?
I somehow swear I've seen this before, but so far it's caught my interest. Work on your POVs and check over your writing for mistakes but so far I'm enjoying it
I did regret the beginning I could hace done better I'll proably rewrite
You need to try to be more consistent with your POVs. You keep switching from 1st person to 3rd and also if you are going to keep switching POVs every paragraph might as well keep it in 3rd so that you don't have to keep saying who's pov it is. It's a good story tho :)