Bad Boy & Bad Girl

Bad Boy & Bad Girl

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RulerOfShadows By RulerOfShadows Updated Sep 04, 2015

"Hi! My name is Tyler and this is the story of a good girl and a good boy..." *slap* "Ow! What was that for?!" 
"For making a mistake in MY story, do it again" 
"Fine! This is a story about a good girl and a bad boy..." *slap* "Are you kidding me?!" 
"No, try again" 
"THIS STORY IS ABOUT A BAD GIRL THAT LIKES TO SLAP ME AND A GOOD BOY..." *slap* "Unbelievable"  
"I'm waiting..." 
"Hello there, this story is about a bad girl and a bad boy, it's really interesting and if you don't read it I get slapped, so please be kind and read it"
  "It wasn't that hard, was it?" 
"Go to hell... Not you, you stay here and read!"

Instead of using 'and' after each characteristic, you should use commas. That's the grammatical way of listing things
It should be "on school property" and I suggest adding "..." Before that phrase because that's not a complete sentence and the "..." Will make it seem like there's a pause between dialogue like she's thinking about it before she says something so it's not awkward
It's not clear who your talking about when you say "she" in this sentence. I suggest you use a name or a description of the person instead of just using a pronoun
isabela888 isabela888 Jul 18, 2015
i loved your story please update ppppllleeeaaassseee!!!!!!:'(
ivefallenhard45 ivefallenhard45 Jul 01, 2014
I love it plzz update and read My story which is my life+his life=don't match
shauna_iguana87 shauna_iguana87 May 29, 2014
I'm in love with this book (: please please with a cherry on top update (: