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Demon's Paradise (The Write Awards 2013 Entry)

Demon's Paradise (The Write Awards 2013 Entry)

2.1K Reads 98 Votes 21 Part Story
QDesjardin By QDesjardin Updated Oct 31, 2013

Emilia LeBlanc, a girl of age 24, is invited to an antiquated mansion with her friend Johan for a relaxing vacation in Dusseldorf, Germany.

But as it turns out, it is not that simple.

Unseen forces haunt the mansion, which resides beside the lost civilisation of Anor Londo. Its inhabitants are pulled in .. deeper and deeper into a dark and beautiful chasm that is beyond anyone's grasp.

- - Dec 15, 2013
Interesting start so far:) I think there's a simple elegance to your story thus far that is appealing to read. It isn't my usual type of story but you get right to the point with your narrative, which is one facet of your writing style that encouraged me to read on. Nice start.
cowsoftime cowsoftime Jun 18, 2013
Your writing style is really nice, the descriptions are vivid. Please continue writing!
IssaJabroni IssaJabroni Mar 19, 2013
This chapter is really engaging and mysterious. Who the man is and what is growing within his awareness makes people read on. Great job! :D
Lolala244 Lolala244 Mar 08, 2013
You use great imagery! This prologue was amazing! I feel like I was actually there with him. Great job :)
LostInInk LostInInk Mar 08, 2013
.... That was incredibly tense and scary. You definitely have a talent for this genre. I shall vote and I shall read! :D
QDesjardin QDesjardin Mar 07, 2013
@Rysalix Merci - a reviewer has mentioned the grammatical thingys earlier, but thank you for pointing them out.