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Michael M. Farnsworth By mfarnz Completed

A desert planet. A dangerous secret.

When Skylar's enigmatic uncle warns him to stay away from the mysterious winged insects that have been sighted on other planets, he thinks little of it; no one has seen the insects on their own planet of Haladras. His uncle knows more than he's telling, though. The creatures are not insects, but machines. And they're hunting for Skylar. Only after Skylar narrowly escapes capture and flees Haladras with his uncle does he learn the whole truth. What his uncle reveals will shatter Skylar's world. Torn from the girl he loves and thrust into the center of a conflict that will consume the empire, Skylar must fight for all he cares for, even as he struggles to know who he can trust.

Star Wars meets The Lord of the Rings. HALADRAS is the first installment in a gripping new YA adventure.

If this is your first time stringing a story together keep up what you are doing. 1 ata boy
ericdabbs ericdabbs Nov 27, 2016
Really enjoyed the first chapter. Will definitely read more.
CelestriaUniverse CelestriaUniverse Dec 30, 2016
Nice start, doesnt fall into the usual trappings for hard-scifi of throwing chapter one into a splurge of needless exposition. Nicely done.
                              Celestria - Journey Ever Onwards
maxd01 maxd01 Nov 14, 2016
How did he go from medical to a transport?  Need to do some sort of explaination on how that happened.  Might consider reorganizing the paragraphs to make it flow better.
                              BTW I am enjoying the story so far.  If I keep enjoying it I will recommend it to my followers.
ericdabbs ericdabbs Nov 28, 2016
I'm liking this story. The characters. The different setting. Good writing. Probably the only thing that needs to be done is put a scene break between the medical infirmary and the flight home. Had to reread it to catch what happened, but this is a really intriguing story so far.
twitchingmean4 twitchingmean4 Jul 09, 2015
This is your first book? Your pretty good at writing don't give it up