The Numbered

The Numbered

3.8M Reads 119K Votes 78 Part Story
MJ Gary By bnlfan Completed

Originally called Flawed.
Watty 2015 Winner.

Imagine the second you're born, a consultant removes you from your mother's grasp and runs a battery of genetic and physiological tests on you. Thirty minutes later they give you a score out of one hundred which denotes your level of perfection. If your score is above eighty and you work hard to maintain that score you will have a charmed life; well fed, well-rewarded, spoiled. But fall below eighty and you're labelled Sub-80,  and life will not be so kind.  

Hannah is adopted by a Sub-80 family when her birth parents choose their social standing over their daughter and endures a life of struggle, hunger and service.  One day Hannah is escorted to the regional government office and told that the Consultant who delivered her, who labelled her Sub-80 got it wrong!  Now she is being relocated back to her birth parents, to live as one of the Ninety-Five,  all medically and legally judged as perfect. Entering this new life Hannah has an impossible decision to make which puts not only hers, but the lives of everyone she cares about at great risk.

The Numbered-  where no one wants to be number one.

A/N   This story is a first, warts-and-all draft and is being slowly edited.

Thank you for reading.

xxRebelWriter xxRebelWriter 6 days ago
Uhhh.... should I be panicking or? Is this the main character? Probably not.... BETTER READ ON
Cece5522 Cece5522 Sep 17, 2016
Aww he sounds like a broken hearted guy... I don't know how to feel. 💔 😪
Chrysbliss Chrysbliss Aug 16, 2016
JAKE ABEL!JAKE ABEL IS IN THE CAST!IT WAS A GREAT CHAPTER 1 AND THEN I SAW JAKE AND I WAS LIKE: "NOW I GOT TWO GOOD REASONS TO CONTINUE"
LizzieWalker8 LizzieWalker8 Aug 22, 2016
 #rr that little shît will be the death of me and my imagination!!
asmark asmark Dec 17, 2016
Great opening.  Leaves so many questions unanswered.  I love it.
Applejack296 Applejack296 Oct 12, 2016
This is really awesome! Great beginning. Really captured my attention.