''Shhh!'' He said.
I did what I was told and went silent.
''They're here.'' He said looking through the whole in the door.
I slowly walked over too him and screamed towards the door for someone to help me. Hoping someone would here me.
A little bit more detail should be added but otherwise it's good
Umm could u possibly make it longer your chapters, at least for me r quite short
great but it went a little fast ND I agree with @savvystapleton
It is a good way to start out a book. My only thought is to add some more detail to help catch the readers attention.