Don't Make A Sound

Don't Make A Sound

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Marissa Barboza By 1_Marissa_1 Updated Sep 18

''Shhh!'' He said.

I did what I was told and went silent.

''They're here.'' He said looking through the whole in the door.

I slowly walked over too him and screamed towards the door for someone to help me. Hoping someone would here me.

GirlScorpio2002 GirlScorpio2002 3 days ago
A little bit more detail should be added but otherwise it's good
X-Men-For-Life X-Men-For-Life Jul 06, 2015
great but it went a little fast ND I agree with @savvystapleton
savvystapleton savvystapleton Jun 25, 2015
It is a good way to start out a book. My only thought is to add some more detail to help catch the readers attention.