It's a beautiful Day to read this story
I'm more of a silent type. And polite. Never one to disrespect. And kinda narcissistic, so I don't exactly like it. But I'll continue on.
When you are jelly, your gunna need some peanut butter......
I'm a huge grammar Nazi. Plz consider sending the updates to me for proof reading, I can send them back with in the hour.
I ran with kurapika and live hapily ever after! Hahahhahaahahahahhahahahahhahahahahahahhahahahah!!! I cant stop laughing hahahahahahahahahahahahaha!!!! Ok im done,next page!!!
yeah if you do it this way in a long paragraph people who would like to read a part that they like again they wont find it that easily so yeah change it if you want to okay?^_^
I think you should have different paragraphs instead of just one long one.