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Derelict

Derelict

45.7K Reads 6.6K Votes 39 Part Story
J. M. Ford By indyjohn Updated Jan 29

Aliens... they came, they saw, they conquered.

Our world was was nothing to them but an asset to be stripped of resources.  Even 600 years after the majority of them departed, humanity still struggles to survive in the mess they left behind.  Together with their horde of genetically altered life forms and the hostile environment they continue to manipulate, the few remaining alien castaways keep us subjugated and condemned to a life of abject misery.  It's a world where only the strong survive.

Some worship the alien overlords and some work as their lackeys, but all exist at their leniency.

Yet one man has a plan.  He is the Strintouri.  He comes to unite the clans, destroy the overlords, and cleanse the world of their dregs.  He brings hope to a derelict world, but to build anew he must first destroy.

Highest Rank in Science Fiction:  #30 on May 10 & 11, 2016 !!!!!  (But that fact and $2.49 will still only get me nothing more than a cup of coffee)

This paragraph was really the only thing that stuck out to me. It read a little disjointed from the overall tone you had. Especially with the use of 'we'. It breaks the p.o.v for me a bit.
simrobert simrobert Mar 20
The image I have of Rifleman and his burrito right now is making me nauseous.  Good job on the descriptive writing :P
1910orange 1910orange Apr 24
Well written prologue, no doubt about that.
                              
                              You've deftly established the conflict, and explored the world through the eyes of the tenacious MC. No gripping action scenes but who needs it when you have such wonderful grounds to build a story on.
anupamarc anupamarc Nov 20, 2016
Hey, its nice to meet a fellow Sci-fi Wattpader with aliens in the book :))
KaylaAlexisW KaylaAlexisW Sep 03, 2016
I like this paragraph, but it feels almost out of place. It doesn't really flow well from the paragraph before to the paragraph after.
RainerSalt RainerSalt Jan 09
The "he" here is a bit ambiguous. I guess it is Jason, but you might want to make this clearer.