The Boy Across the Street

The Boy Across the Street

60.1K Reads 2.5K Votes 13 Part Story
_erinkate_ By _erinkate_ Completed

She was always in love with the boy across the street. 

[OLD VERSION. Currently editing.]

foreverpurple1000 foreverpurple1000 Apr 15, 2014
You have beautiful word flow if that even makes sense lol.
                              Your descriptions are flawless and the interactions between your character are perfection. This is so great and i am really excited to continue :)
_erinkate_ _erinkate_ Apr 19, 2013
@Hazelliee Thank you!! Yeah its the first story I've written in third point of view, so I'm glad it's turning out okay! :)
blissful_reveries blissful_reveries Apr 19, 2013
First I want to say, I don't really enjoy reading stories in third paragraph, it just doesn't flow as smoothly in my mind :P But this one is totally different. It was very easy to read, descriptions and everything done beautifully :) I like it, continuing :D
                              
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                              xoxo
_UnicornQueen_ _UnicornQueen_ Apr 09, 2013
I love the title. This story is a little cliche but really cute. I would continue reading this. Great description and very little mistakes. I love the idea and Bradbury has a .... suspenseful personality. I think xD. Anyway great job!
Achu2911 Achu2911 Apr 06, 2013
Oh you had me hooked from the start. This one is quite different from others, I can sense.I specially liked it as it is in third person POV. I am going to read further.
GabbieBerrie GabbieBerrie Apr 01, 2013
I love it, even though I'm not to far into it!:-)  Just because I'm a new writer I was wondering if you could give me constructive critasizm(spelling would help too!lol) on my fully published book Trey's Angels Book 1 I want to ki_ _ you(options may vary) thank you sooooo much ur book is very good!