Two girls get into a fist fight. They end up spending hours in detention that leads to a unexpected romance.
Warning: Mature audience advised due to sexual content, violence, and strong language throughout the story.
What the, seriously, that's it, whoa dude that was a very fast move but damn
Great start, I'm already hooked. However...
Do you understand the punctuation known as "commas"? :')
I can edit that if you want-
Good start on the romance, but where's the relationship building? Maybe try being more descriptive, and slow things down.
This, I have to admit, went a little too rush. It's a very good start to a romance, however. Have you thought about expanding this chapter a little?
Who shares that much when first meeting someone,especially someone they just fought
Nice one, i really love reading this kinds of stories that greatly turns me on