!!!!!!!!WARNING!!!!!!!! This Book Is Rated R. Strong Sexual Content. 18 Yrs &' Older Preferred
Don't believe that business trip lie until you start seeing business trip checks coming in
Nice first chapter... Really draws u in.. I feel emotional connected to the characters already
@Veronica1Luv They Blocked Her Out The Mind Link So She Didn't Know Exactly What He Did It Could Be Anything Really Her Father Wasn't Known For That By Others So It Wasn't A Thought. We Know Cuz Rose Explained It
ur dad cheated.... -.- whats so confusing about that? u just heard it... Im pretty sure ur smart and old enough to put the puzzle pieces together.... -.-
Sorry too late... forgetted happened.......... *is that even a word?!?* Who are u again?
The story is interesting. I'll follow and read it.
My first advice would be to make the paragraphs a bit smaller, it would be easyer to read and separate the dialogue. You have two people speaking in the same paragraph and that is confusing for the readers.