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Little Fighter (manxboy)

Little Fighter (manxboy)

65.5K Reads 3.6K Votes 13 Part Story
ZandaleaE By ZandaleaE Updated Dec 14, 2016

Alex is disabled and a werewolf haunted with what his previous pack did to him, his brother and sister drop their lives in their pack and leave through the night and move three towns over to start over. 

But nothing saved them for this...mates, family, new pack and enemies. Will little Alex face his biggest fear of the past and finds his mates, accept them and move on or will everything come back and haunt him...

6MySarcasm6IsDeadly6 6MySarcasm6IsDeadly6 Nov 18, 2016
Dialogue always starts a new paragraph unless the same person is talking jsyk
Foodfollowsme Foodfollowsme Sep 09, 2016
You said you wanted to be notified... You put "your our brother" instead of "you're our brother" liking the story so far 😸👍🏼
Gay_lord343 Gay_lord343 Jan 02
Little tip for a fellow author! Dialogue should end with a comma, unless you're following up with an action. Such as 
                              "I hate you!" He took a shuddering breath after his harsh statment.
                               You can have a period if you include an action in between two separate statements.
6220charactersque 6220charactersque Aug 25, 2016
You need to separate speakers with a new paragraph each and break it up more. At the moment it's just a solid block of text.
This isn't really a mistake, but you put colons after the number in every title apart from chapter 1, 4, 5 and 9.
MissPiggyX MissPiggyX Aug 21, 2016
Finally, an author okay with being told if there's a mistake.