Santino(ON HOLD)

Santino(ON HOLD)

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sarcasticsauce By sarcasticsauce Updated Oct 29

Probably shouldn't read this, for it will be on hold for a while. I need to figure out how to get a computer to type with. I'm sorry for the inconvenience.

"You can't break me Santino.
 I won't let you. I've lost enough. I will not lose me too."

Her breathing staggered. Her brain laid just a slushy mush located in the void of her skull. Her heart beat with the rhythm of the lie that so fluently left her tongue. He had already claimed her soul; her heart. In his violent, blood soaked hands, that seemed clean to the untrained eye.

He was her demise.

For he was the breath that blew out her candle.

Extended Summary In book.

greyschixx greyschixx Apr 04
How tf am I the ungrateful one when millions of ppl out there can't have kids but you're here abusing yours nikka stfu!
PlamediAnne PlamediAnne Mar 29
I think the beginning wasn't really captivating. It was a bit confusing. Maybe as you edit try to add some detail.
PlamediAnne PlamediAnne Mar 29
I think maybe you should try to show that she hates her "father" instead of just saying it. I think the way she acts or talks to him could help show this.
ticketmaster911 ticketmaster911 Nov 28, 2015
Poor Rose. Can I punch her father  show him what it's like being on the opposite side
PlamediAnne PlamediAnne Jul 19, 2015
I've read a couple of stories with abusive parents in it and I really like your approach. You didn't out right say that he was a jerk, you showed us. I really it. It's a really beginning.
PandabearMIKIE PandabearMIKIE Jul 06, 2015
I feel so sad for Rose. I want to just jump through this book and give her a giant hug and let her know that everything will be OK.