The Dragon Oracles. Part One: The Call of the Crown. (Sample)

The Dragon Oracles. Part One: The Call of the Crown. (Sample)

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tjgarrett By tjgarrett Updated Sep 13, 2015

The Dragon Oracles
    
    THE NEW EPIC FANTASY SAGA
    
    A continent on the brink of war. A journey to save a kingdom.
    
    Forced onto a path he does not wish to follow, a young man finds himself the focus of ancient powers.
    
    When Gialyn accompanies his father on a dangerous trek across their homeland, he attracts the gaze of an ancient dragon. The dragon offers Gialyn power, but the price may prove too much to bear. Meanwhile, Brea, the Dragon Guardian, has plans of her own. With the power of her dragon charges, she summons an ancient warrior to aid in their cause. But will this powerful being help them, or add itself to their growing list of enemies?
    
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- - Dec 14, 2015 05:18AM
Imo this is waay too much detail for a first chapter. While readers obviously have to take in new characters, overwhelming them with information about the setting is counterproductive and ruins the attention grabbing aspect.
CaidanFleming CaidanFleming Dec 02, 2015 04:43PM
This has an excellent start. Within minutes, you had me drawn into it, I could picture it clearly in my mind.
pigginauthor pigginauthor Nov 11, 2015 11:47PM
This has a good start, though I wonder if the first three paragraphs would have been better written in dialogue.  Perhaps I'm being nit-picky. With good descriptive settings,  I find I'm drawn into this story, good job.
Pqboyd Pqboyd Oct 08, 2015 02:56PM
Very good writing - and you are spinning quite a tale here - beautifully done
Samjam17 Samjam17 Sep 14, 2015 08:30AM
I have already read part 1 but then it disappeared. . Is this the same book or a different book and were can I find part 2 because I really loved the first book!!!
I've read all three..and then it was all gone..was reading Mind of Mersus but then it was gone. are you published now? can i find you in ibooks? i want to buy. thanks TJ...you're the best