The Dragon Oracles. Part One: The Call of the Crown. (Sample)

The Dragon Oracles. Part One: The Call of the Crown. (Sample)

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tjgarrett By tjgarrett Updated Sep 13, 2015

The Dragon Oracles
    
    THE NEW EPIC FANTASY SAGA
    
    A continent on the brink of war. A journey to save a kingdom.
    
    Forced onto a path he does not wish to follow, a young man finds himself the focus of ancient powers.
    
    When Gialyn accompanies his father on a dangerous trek across their homeland, he attracts the gaze of an ancient dragon. The dragon offers Gialyn power, but the price may prove too much to bear. Meanwhile, Brea, the Dragon Guardian, has plans of her own. With the power of her dragon charges, she summons an ancient warrior to aid in their cause. But will this powerful being help them, or add itself to their growing list of enemies?
    
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ArcadianApathy ArcadianApathy Apr 08, 2016 02:35AM
My first impression was that this was an Eragon-inspired thing except the dragons were the one with the huge army and Galbatorix had died instead of the dragon riders.
You have a gift for providing detail.  It's never just listing points.  I really like that.
Nicole_Sloan Nicole_Sloan Apr 11, 2016 06:07AM
I really like this first chapter. I'm excited to keep going. I think it has great detail which helps me see the story in my mind.
- - Dec 14, 2015 05:18AM
Imo this is waay too much detail for a first chapter. While readers obviously have to take in new characters, overwhelming them with information about the setting is counterproductive and ruins the attention grabbing aspect.
Creepazoidzes Creepazoidzes Dec 02, 2015 04:43PM
This has an excellent start. Within minutes, you had me drawn into it, I could picture it clearly in my mind.
pigginauthor pigginauthor Nov 11, 2015 11:47PM
This has a good start, though I wonder if the first three paragraphs would have been better written in dialogue.  Perhaps I'm being nit-picky. With good descriptive settings,  I find I'm drawn into this story, good job.