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Green Eyes, White Lies

Green Eyes, White Lies

52K Reads 447 Votes 16 Part Story
NoOneOfConsequence1 By NoOneOfConsequence1 Completed

Jenn is a 26 yr. old living a dream; she has the perfect job, a cute apartment, and a movie star boyfriend.  If only she was happy and would stop having dreams of a little girl with her hair and her best friend's eyes.  So what happens when she travels back home for her sister's wedding?  

NoOneOfConsequence1 NoOneOfConsequence1 Jan 11, 2011
@SilverLady Thank you for your comment... The characters, the main character in particular, has lots of flaws and a past that make her the way she is and I'm glad you recognized that :)  I hope you keep reading and enjoy
NoOneOfConsequence1 NoOneOfConsequence1 Sep 18, 2010
                              Thank you for your comment and vote.  I was hoping for more constructive criticism and what mistakes you are referring to.   I'm sorry it seems like a Mary Sue to you.  I disagree but I can see where that idea would come from.  
xXHarlequinn xXHarlequinn Sep 17, 2010
You're a very good writer, but I'm afraid I'm not a fan of your story. I don't like Mary Sue books and the fact that Jack and Ayita have feelings for eachother is too obvious. There are also a few mistakes here and there, but Ill give you my vote anyway because I still feel that you deserve it.
supernatural-lover supernatural-lover Sep 07, 2010
i like this, voted
                              please can you read my story called "Room 101 is it a place of fear or love?" i would ready appreciate vote and fanning =D