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Teenage Witches (On Hold)

Teenage Witches (On Hold)

7.8K Reads 118 Votes 15 Part Story
Shannon By Babywriter Updated Apr 29, 2013

Paige is suddenly thrown into a world of magic, a world she never knew existed. A world of new boys, and new dangers. So what happens when sisters turn against each other? Looks like Paige is about to find out.

Babywriter Babywriter May 06, 2012
@TigerBee Thanks I really appreciate the critique. I'll get to work on making the changes you suggested :)
TigerBee TigerBee May 06, 2012
Continued critique :
                              
                              Capitalizing does not draw in any emphasis.
                              
                              Your concept is good, but give it some more thought. Try and make it all sound realistic rather than giving people a sense of abhor. I have felt it, to be blatantly honest.
                              
                              
                              Good luck. =)
                              
                              PS - Your cover is cute!
Tardis_Lady Tardis_Lady Mar 15, 2012
I like the idea of the story but your writing needs to be a bit more...it needs....well there are some things that need fixing
xKelliCx xKelliCx May 16, 2011
Really good start so far! I love fantasy and such so this story is definitely for me! I think i'll read more... :D