Paige is suddenly thrown into a world of magic, a world she never knew existed. A world of new boys, and new dangers. So what happens when sisters turn against each other? Looks like Paige is about to find out.
@TigerBee Thanks I really appreciate the critique. I'll get to work on making the changes you suggested :)
Continued critique :
Capitalizing does not draw in any emphasis.
Your concept is good, but give it some more thought. Try and make it all sound realistic rather than giving people a sense of abhor. I have felt it, to be blatantly honest.
Good luck. =)
PS - Your cover is cute!
I like the idea of the story but your writing needs to be a bit more...it needs....well there are some things that need fixing
Really good start so far! I love fantasy and such so this story is definitely for me! I think i'll read more... :D