His Guardian Angel (Phanfic)

His Guardian Angel (Phanfic)

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Dawnstopher By dawnstopherdun Completed

Dan Howell lived alone in his flat. Or at least he thought. Things would randomly happen like if he lost something it would randomly appear next to him out of nowhere. If he was having a bad day things that made Dan happy would be randomly right next to him. What happens when he finally sees the gorgeous creature (Phil Lester) that lives with him? Read on to find out. 
(First phanfic. Hope you guys like my story. ^-^ Picture cover does not belong to me. No trigger warnings. ^-^)

Not trying to seem rude but you should learn the difference between "then" and "than"
dawnstopherdun dawnstopherdun 2 days ago
Thanks. I guess. I'm trying to write better. So give me credit for that at least.
Omg! I'm a waitress at the local pub and something like that happened to me but with drinks and everyone looked at me, I'm only 13 don't judge me!
Also, another thing I noticed (and forgot to add) is that it switches from first person to third? Is that supposed to happen?
It's good so far. Writing takes practice we weren't born writers. If you want more comments j would suggest breaking this up into smaller paragraphs.
jilly2272 jilly2272 May 11, 2015
Keep up the good work! As a fellow writer I understand how hard starting off the first couple of chapters are