Game of Thrones: The lost Targaryen (Jon Snow Fanfic)

Game of Thrones: The lost Targaryen (Jon Snow Fanfic)

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Diana By DianaIsabel1D Completed

"It becomes harder and harder to breath and from nowhere I start to hear some footsteps that I believe to be just my imagination but then a men with long dark hair and equally dark bear and eyes looks at me curious.
-Who are you? - He says and I try to speak but my voice just doesn't come out.
For the dark clothes I immediately know that he must be a men from the Night's Watch. With an enormous difficulty I lift my harm and touch is bear. His face seems incredibly harm...
-Aldith... - I whisper and he grabs me in his strong harms.
I try to say 'thank you' but I feel too weak and give up on the idea. Even though I don't know him I just know that I can trust him and so I leave my body to rest in his arms and let darkness invade my mind."

Ur English is super good. There's mistakes here and there but gret
AndreaHlb AndreaHlb Aug 27
Change the word soap, it is actually spelled soup, soap is the thing that you use to wash your body. I was a bit confused at first.
nymeria_572 nymeria_572 Aug 27
This is so good, your English is better than mine and I am English!!
I liked the first chapter and your english isn't too bad. Good job! 😃
Considering I've seen worse writing from people who have English as their main language, you pass my test with flying colors!
I hate to be that person, but I'm really annoyed by the lack of quotation marks.