The Broken Hero (Percy Jackson Fanfiction)

The Broken Hero (Percy Jackson Fanfiction)

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Brickbuilder65 By StarWarsFan4Life Completed

Pain, hurt, betrayal. That's all Percy Jackson former hero of Olympus felt when  Nathan West came. Everyone betrayed him except for Jason, Piper, Frank, Hazel, Leo, Nico, Thalia and Chiron.

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  • percyjackson
Please improve the following:
                               Grammar
                              Punctuation
                               Mimicking personalities
You know getting stuff from an invisible locker... that sounds familiar.   A lot like when certain descendents of Egyptian pharaohs reach into the duat.   Oh wait...
1. What does death even smell like?
                              2. How can Lucas smell death?
                              3. How does Lucas know what death smells like?
                              4. NICO!
forged by the elves of Gondolin. should i have memorized this? no, probably not. Am i insane? yes, definately.
IvianTan IvianTan Sep 22, 2016
Can you pls improve dialougue, grammar and spelling? It's hard to understand your writing.
minorfangirlgoddess minorfangirlgoddess Nov 28, 2016
Nico... Have u been giving charity to strangers? How sweet, but it's creepy.