The Broken Hero (Percy Jackson Fanfiction)

The Broken Hero (Percy Jackson Fanfiction)

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Brickbuilder65 By StarWarsFan4Life Completed

Pain, hurt, betrayal. That's all Percy Jackson former hero of Olympus felt when  Nathan West came. Everyone betrayed him except for Jason, Piper, Frank, Hazel, Leo, Nico, Thalia and Chiron.

Please improve the following:
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                               Mimicking personalities
forged by the elves of Gondolin. should i have memorized this? no, probably not. Am i insane? yes, definately.
IvianTan IvianTan Sep 22, 2016
Can you pls improve dialougue, grammar and spelling? It's hard to understand your writing.
minorfangirlgoddess minorfangirlgoddess Nov 28, 2016
Nico... Have u been giving charity to strangers? How sweet, but it's creepy.
RaymondFisk RaymondFisk Jul 31, 2016
Not being rude cuz so far it's good but Kronos isn't a primordal he's a Titan, and plz rember I am not trying to offend you
silentshadowklrturbo silentshadowklrturbo Nov 07, 2016
so lucus is egyptian, percy runs away from percy cliche and what?