The Never Ending Dream

The Never Ending Dream

5 Part Story 591 Reads 24 Votes
Karine By karineprincess Updated Aug 03, 2011

A dream that goes on and on every night, like the continuation to a never ending story. A girl who lives dazed, her mind never in reality, entranced by the alluring eyes of the mysterious man she sees every night. Isleen soon finds herself slowly paying attention to the real world -  the world which now also contains those very same eyes.

karineprincess karineprincess Jul 13, 2011 07:10PM
@AngeliqueAngel I forgot to tag you when I replied...anyway, just look at the comment below. Sorry.
karineprincess karineprincess Jul 13, 2011 07:06PM
Thanks. xD
                              And I get what you mean about the onomatopoeia. I'll try to make it better. But, I think I may have left you confused...There is no explosion. Just the feeling of when your body gets really hot. I should probably change that too...
MarineLynn MarineLynn Jul 12, 2011 04:59PM
Nice description! I thought the flow was nice. I couldn't find any major errors that needed to be fixed. 
dear-shay dear-shay Jul 12, 2011 01:49PM
Wow very well written chapter ! Really descriptive and I actually really enjoyed reading this ! Good job (:
Jessabellx Jessabellx Jul 07, 2011 06:57AM
I like it (: Love the idea too -it's really unique ! And I love he name Isleen! 
                              I just love the whole thing :D
karineprincess karineprincess Jul 02, 2011 11:54PM
@JESSaBELLIE Yay! Thank you so much. I'll try my best to reach it's potential. xD