In which Niall's a hybrid, but that doesn't stop the boys from loving him.
If you could add more space between each paragraph it is much easier to read and more appealing to the eye
My mum would've reacted quite like this, if it was a teenager looking like Niall...
You write great! But are some words italicized for a reason? I'm just curious.
I don't know what this is a fan fiction of but it's quite good. I hope this kid finds some freedom and his happiness.
I hope you write more this is getting good and your only up to chapter 2 .