The Kindly Ones

The Kindly Ones

1.6K Reads 140 Votes 16 Part Story
MrsCosmopilite By MrsCosmopilite Updated Jan 08, 2017

Local news anchor Steve Carrington has a lead on a big story that could take down a rising star in Congress.  The only problem is, breaking it could cost him everything.  Meanwhile, prosecutor Natalie Masterson's  first solo case is turning from simple to disastrous, through no fault of her own.  

Just for the record, this piece has some bad language and some troubling subject matter.

  • legal
  • mystery
anupamarc anupamarc Jun 23, 2016
The very first para - I had to read a few times. A full stop instead of a comma might make it easy on the eye.
jilguera jilguera Feb 10, 2016
Interesting beginning.  I really like how you dealt with such a topic maturely and brought up some really interesting questions. That in itself is nice but it also gets me thinking on how this topic will tie in with the story. In a lot less words - it makes me want to turn the page.
JABrownOfficial JABrownOfficial Dec 14, 2015
This is the biggest paragraph I have ever seen in a wattpad book. For reading on a screen it is difficult to read and needs breaking up.
Brimming_with_words Brimming_with_words Dec 11, 2015
This was pretty good. Very good in fact! Loved your use of descriptions and the dialogue was very realistic. I'll admit that this wasn't quite the attention grabber but I honestly don't. Some may, but for me the writing was nicely done so that wasn't much of a problem.
AlcinaMystic AlcinaMystic Nov 30, 2015
I just wanted to tell you that I really enjoyed your characters. Earlier I was so focused on the critique that I didn't really think about the comments. Natalie was probably the character I liked the best (in chapter3). I hope there's more of her. She's super cool.
AlcinaMystic AlcinaMystic Nov 30, 2015
This was definitely not what I was expecting.  However it was fresh and new. I think there should have been a rating or something on this story. Most people don't, so that's probably just my own opinion.