Dragon Tamer

Dragon Tamer

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Esther By EstherDramaqueen Updated Sep 11

Marcie is an oddity in her village, the daughter of a widower with both village and outsider blood in her veins. She cares for her drunken father, and struggles to fit in with the rest of the village. 
Everything changes when she comes across two dragons, a mother and her new born, and unwittingly becomes the Tamer of the baby dragon when his mother dies. 
This new unlikely bond completely changes her life and opens doors to her future that she would have never thought possible whilst also causing her pain and heartache.

Giggly_Fits Giggly_Fits Sep 07
"The cliff side have another rumble(.) Marcie was finding it hard to breath (breathe*), her breath was coming out in little pants (try using another word such as huffing, panting, or hyperventilating). She took a long deep breath (refer up there^)." Punctuation is key; no one likes run-on sentences
AmbiaBegum AmbiaBegum Sep 12
Not to be annoying but a full stop may make this passage flow better ☺
You should try to say her hair flew or waved behind her. Saying her hair flapped makes it sound like one solid object.
Giggly_Fits Giggly_Fits Sep 07
Please punctuate more. It makes it easier for everyone to read.
ElfQueenZ ElfQueenZ Sep 03
She gripped the bow and quiver tightly, ready to use them if needed. ;-)
In one of the paragraphs, you kinda used breath too many times.