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Dragon Tamer

Dragon Tamer

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Esther By EstherDramaqueen Completed

Marcie is an oddity in her village, the daughter of a widower with both village and outsider blood in her veins. She cares for her drunken father, and struggles to fit in with the rest of the village. 
Everything changes when she comes across two dragons, a mother and her new born, and unwittingly becomes the Tamer of the baby dragon when his mother dies. 
This new unlikely bond completely changes her life and opens doors to her future that she would have never thought possible whilst also causing her pain and heartache.

triptych triptych 4 days ago
Great beginning! You could break some of those long comma separated phrases into their own sentences .
Again, a run on sentence. Also again, your tense switches here. Do "she really should have been returning to the village."
I feel like a better way to say this would be "Marcie rose carefully and slowly to her feet, her heart steadily beating in her chest." Just a recommendation.
dobbyvanity dobbyvanity 6 days ago
She would have broken something or at least sprained her leg
The wording here switches from past tense to present tense when you said "so there must be something there." Try "so there was definitely something there."
Are we just gonna ignore the fact that it reads "make out a little" likee seariously Marcie we dont have time for your hormones!!