❧ Soul Tear ❧(On Hold! Slow Updates - Heavy Revisions Chapter 16 + )

❧ Soul Tear ❧(On Hold! Slow Updates - Heavy Revisions Chapter 16 + )

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𝓇𝑜𝒷𝒾𝓃 𝓉. 𝓋𝒶𝓁𝑒 By darkocean Updated 6 days ago

Trying out a new blurb:

Merryn is a young Elven priestess that had taken emergency training of a thief to help her people steal the Book of Perdicion. The humans had taken it after winning the blood war, now five hundred years later the runes weakened. The god's shadows prowled the city, unable to leave with its soul still bound to the book.

The Adapts said the runes would hold until she came back. 

They were wrong. 


Revisions are almost done! 30 chapters to go.

Update: 9/13/2017 - 29 chapters to go. 

Update: 12/6/2017 - 27 chapters left to fix. Then reading them all over again, making notes, keeping track of the forshadowing, red herrings (hea hea), twists, reveals, and backstory. Get all those in and the ending will fall in place like a Tetris block. 😉 

I do apologize for being an awful slow update writer! When this book is done I'll be taking a break from fantasy and working on a completely different kind of book, as a thank you for any fans that waited this out.

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I've been told that numbers should be written in full (so ten instead of 10)
darkocean darkocean Nov 04
Thank you, I'll  do that. I tend to unintentionally leave out words when writing, 'the' is another one that gets left out.
darkocean darkocean Nov 15
No, its fine. Your the second one that diest like the word even. Everyone uses the word quiet, but my thinking is she's trying to be quiet by slowing her breathing and making it stay even. 
                              
                              I better go and edit this and spell that out... xP
xSceneGirl xSceneGirl Nov 04
I would think you should put a conjunction here. Like "The dangling coin pouch on her hip jangled so she grasped it, silencing it." It follows sequentially of what happens in result of or after.
darkocean darkocean Nov 15
Sorry for all bla bla. I'm hunting down full chapters to kill, delete and rip out. If you spot any that later on don't make any sense or feel like filler let ne know. Am eager to bring the word count down.
xSceneGirl xSceneGirl Nov 04
Remove the comma after alleyways. It kinda disrupts the flow for me.