❧ Soul Tear ❧(On Hold! Slow Updates - Heavy Revisions Chapter 16 + )

❧ Soul Tear ❧(On Hold! Slow Updates - Heavy Revisions Chapter 16 + )

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𝓇𝑜𝒷𝒾𝓃 𝓉. 𝓋𝒶𝓁𝑒 By darkocean Updated Mar 17

Trying out a new blurb:

Merryn is a young Elven priestess that had taken emergency training of a thief to help her people steal the Book of Perdicion. The humans had taken it after winning the blood war, now five hundred years later the runes weakened. The god's shadows prowled the city, unable to leave with its soul still bound to the book.

The Adapts said the runes would hold until she came back. 

They were wrong. 


Revisions are almost done! 30 chapters to go.

Update: 9/13/2017 - 29 chapters to go.

  • adventure
  • assassin
  • badass
  • darkfantasy
  • elf
  • fantasy
  • femaleprotagonist
  • friendship
  • horror
  • magic
  • orginal
  • projecttheundiscovered
  • thief
  • thriller
  • writteninaction
Dante_Greywolf Dante_Greywolf 4 days ago
I've been told that numbers should be written in full (so ten instead of 10)
darkocean darkocean Nov 04
Thank you, I'll  do that. I tend to unintentionally leave out words when writing, 'the' is another one that gets left out.
darkocean darkocean 4 days ago
No, its fine. Your the second one that diest like the word even. Everyone uses the word quiet, but my thinking is she's trying to be quiet by slowing her breathing and making it stay even. 
                              
                              I better go and edit this and spell that out... xP
darkocean darkocean 4 days ago
Sorry for all bla bla. I'm hunting down full chapters to kill, delete and rip out. If you spot any that later on don't make any sense or feel like filler let ne know. Am eager to bring the word count down.
xSceneGirl xSceneGirl Nov 04
Remove the comma after alleyways. It kinda disrupts the flow for me.
Dante_Greywolf Dante_Greywolf 4 days ago
I see what you mean with the deep pov and the inner thoughts. It's an interesting approach. I'm not sure yet if I like it/will work in my story. But it's still good to see it in practice