❧ Soul Tear ❧(On Hold! Slow Updates - Heavy Revisions Chapter 16 + )

❧ Soul Tear ❧(On Hold! Slow Updates - Heavy Revisions Chapter 16 + )

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𝓇𝑜𝒷𝒾𝓃 𝓉. 𝓋𝒶𝓁𝑒 By darkocean Updated 2 days ago

Merryn Dentree is a 70-year-old Elven priestess (20 in human years,) who gave up the quiet life to help her people. 

A god imprisoned within the ancient Book of Souls has weakened the rune seals that bound him to it. Plans to destroy him go askew, minutes after handling the book, the runes shatter. With no physical body to house him, he merged with Merryns.

Racing home she's desperate for help; all the while a wrathful guard hunts her, waiting to strike. 

Two hearts, two minds. Keeping her sanity soon becomes the biggest battle of all. 

Revisions are almost done! 30 chapters to go.

Update: 9/13/2017 - 29 chapters to go.

Also, it's unclear what 'it' is. The port? The book? The city?
darkocean darkocean Apr 01
Actually, I didn't ask that person to come in and critique (not that I remember.)  so please if you are don't use their critique as a reference. If I'm wrong forgive me.
I liked the descriptions of the actions. For me it was a little confusing what was going on, but that was probably just because I was tiered. But other than that, VERY good first chapter! :)
darkocean darkocean 2 days ago
@slythergriffunny Okay, did a small edit. Is it better or worse? Thanks for the input.
slythergriffunny slythergriffunny 2 days ago
 #MarshmellowBC
                              I love this. It is a really creative way of letting us know she doesn't belong.
darkocean darkocean 2 days ago
Think of it as spitting that is spraying out and covering yoyr cheek and maybe eye lid too. Blea!