(On Hold)❧ Soul Tear ❧ Book One: The Last Spirit Adapt

(On Hold)❧ Soul Tear ❧ Book One: The Last Spirit Adapt

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Robin T. Vale By darkocean Updated Mar 04

Trying out a new blurb:

Merryn is a young Elven priestess that had taken emergency training of a thief to help her people steal the Book of Perdicion. The humans had taken it after winning the blood war, now five hundred years later the runes weakened. The god's shadows prowled the city, unable to leave with its soul still bound to the book.

The Adapts said the runes would hold until she came back. 

They were wrong. 

(The book is still being updated, it's just in the older chapters already written. This has to be done or the ending won't make any sense. I can now see where I went wrong, so expect a few of the ending chapters to be changed or disappear as I tweak things. 

Many thanks to Dante_Greywolf for helping me fix things. :D

Revisions are almost done! 30 chapters to go.

Update: 9/13/2017 - 29 chapters to go. 

Update: 12/6/2017 - 27 chapters left to fix. Then reading them all over again, making notes, keeping track of the foreshadowing, red herrings (hea hea), twists, reveals, and backstory. Get all those in and the ending will fall in place like a Tetris block. 

I do apologize for being an awful slow update writer! When this book is done I'll be taking a break from fantasy and working on a completely different kind of book, as a thank you for any fans that waited this out.

Update: 1/29/2018 

To work on: 

1. Finish the current revision. 

2. Fix the dialogue formatting.

3. Fix the lack of inner thoughts, up it say 1-10% or so find where they would fit.

4. Add in a little more backstory as you're not teasing readers, you're tormenting them! 😑 Whoops. Wasn't my intention, wanted to invoke curiosity, lol. I'll fix it, but in small amounts too much and it'll break things. 

Update: 4/24/2018 

25 chapters left to fix.

  • adventure
  • assassin
  • badass
  • crazyrevels
  • darkfantasy
  • deeppov
  • elf
  • fantasy
  • femaleprotagonist
  • friendship
  • horror
  • magic
  • originalpovstyle
  • projectreadersreact
  • thief
  • thriller
  • twists
  • writteninaction
darkocean darkocean Mar 12
All critique comments have been read and the edits applied to this chapter, thanks, everyone!
Dante_Greywolf Dante_Greywolf Nov 15, 2017
I've been told that numbers should be written in full (so ten instead of 10)
darkocean darkocean Nov 15, 2017
No, its fine. Your the second one that diest like the word even. Everyone uses the word quiet, but my thinking is she's trying to be quiet by slowing her breathing and making it stay even. 
                              I better go and edit this and spell that out... xP
darkocean darkocean Nov 15, 2017
Sorry for all bla bla. I'm hunting down full chapters to kill, delete and rip out. If you spot any that later on don't make any sense or feel like filler let ne know. Am eager to bring the word count down.
Dante_Greywolf Dante_Greywolf Nov 15, 2017
I see what you mean with the deep pov and the inner thoughts. It's an interesting approach. I'm not sure yet if I like it/will work in my story. But it's still good to see it in practice
Dante_Greywolf Dante_Greywolf Nov 15, 2017
Must be a special home (so good I started reading this from scratch again. I sorta remember what it was about. But it's much more fun to read all the details again)