(On Hold)❧ Soul Tear ❧ Book One: The Last Spirit Adapt

(On Hold)❧ Soul Tear ❧ Book One: The Last Spirit Adapt

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Robin T. Vale By darkocean Updated Dec 05, 2017

Trying out a new blurb:

Merryn is a young Elven priestess that had taken emergency training of a thief to help her people steal the Book of Perdicion. The humans had taken it after winning the blood war, now five hundred years later the runes weakened. The god's shadows prowled the city, unable to leave with its soul still bound to the book.

The Adapts said the runes would hold until she came back. 

They were wrong. 

(The book is still being updated, it's just in the older chapters already written. This has to be done or the ending won't make any sense. I can now see where I went wrong, so expect a few of the ending chapters to be changed or disappear as I tweak things. 

Many thanks to Dante_Greywolf for helping me fix things. :D

Revisions are almost done! 30 chapters to go.

Update: 9/13/2017 - 29 chapters to go. 

Update: 12/6/2017 - 27 chapters left to fix. Then reading them all over again, making notes, keeping track of the foreshadowing, red herrings (hea hea), twists, reveals, and backstory. Get all those in and the ending will fall in place like a Tetris block. 

I do apologize for being an awful slow update writer! When this book is done I'll be taking a break from fantasy and working on a completely different kind of book, as a thank you for any fans that waited this out.

Update: 1/29/2018 

To work on: 

1. Finish the current revision. 

2. Fix the dialogue formatting.

3. Fix the lack of inner thoughts, up it say 1-10% or so find where they would fit.

4. Add in a little more backstory as you're not teasing readers, you're tormenting them! 😑 Whoops. Wasn't my intention, wanted to invoke curiosity, lol. I'll fix it, but in small amounts too much and it'll break things.

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Dante_Greywolf Dante_Greywolf Nov 15, 2017
I've been told that numbers should be written in full (so ten instead of 10)
darkocean darkocean Nov 15, 2017
No, its fine. Your the second one that diest like the word even. Everyone uses the word quiet, but my thinking is she's trying to be quiet by slowing her breathing and making it stay even. 
                              
                              I better go and edit this and spell that out... xP
word-warrior word-warrior 3 days ago
I realised that there is a lack of 'I' before sentences. 😂
word-warrior word-warrior 3 days ago
I suggest you don't begin with a sentence fragment. It sort of throws me off, and doesn't flow very well.
word-warrior word-warrior 3 days ago
Maybe italicize the sound, or do something to separate it from original text
darkocean darkocean Nov 15, 2017
Sorry for all bla bla. I'm hunting down full chapters to kill, delete and rip out. If you spot any that later on don't make any sense or feel like filler let ne know. Am eager to bring the word count down.