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Juli Monae By juli_monae Updated Mar 15

Aceria is a corrupt land, under the rule of a tyrannical King, and Fyra, a thief who is more than she seems, has seen the kingdom's suffering firsthand. She has wandered the impoverished towns and cities, running from the past. She saw her mother killed in front of her, and has watched people with gifts like hers burned, drowned and imprisoned. She doesn't believe she has the strength to change anything. 

Fyra is keeping secrets: about who she is, her affinity for fire, and the dark forces poisoning the kingdom.  When she is caught, and brought to Castle Bluedale, the place she has only seen in her nightmares, she befriends the prince, a charming yet infuriating mystery. But her past comes back to haunt her, and new enemies in the castle bring her nightmares to life.

finallyFREE finallyFREE Mar 29
Nice but this scene moved waay too fast. Flesh it out with some imagery and characterization.
KTimogerie KTimogerie Jan 12
@DilemmaDiana don't forget the use of the period when action is committed after or before the dialogue.
ngdaniel ngdaniel Jul 14, 2016
I've been meaning to read this story for a while...I'm excited to see where this goes! Well done!🔥
15rscooby 15rscooby Jan 26
Idk if u r doing this just to give us some background information or not, but if you are, don't. It's too early on and it just sounds a bit odd
Commas go after all dialogue, but inside the ending quotation mark. Unless of course you use a question or explanation mark. Then you put the punctuation where you would the comma, or vice versa.
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