my mate rejected me

my mate rejected me

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omaris By christal2742030 Updated Jun 06

I was unwanted ,ugly i had glasses they all made fun of me i thought my mate would come to my rescue i thought wrong because he rejected me want to know who he was....... that was alpha or soon to be alpha of the moonlight pack i thought he would be the last peeson to hurt me but i was wrong so i had to get away i had to find someone who would wipe my tears away,some one who would love me and never leave me,would that be too much to ask cuz i dont think it is.                                                                                                                                      Amanda was a nice gurl she always did good in school she wated for her mate everything she did was good until the alpha's birthday that day he would clame someone as his but when she looks into his eyes at her party she says mate and everybody stops and stares and whisper what that ugly girl is her mate but she doesnt care not until he rejects her she coudnt bare it so she runs away and becomes a rouge after 2 years of that she finds a pack and falls in love but wat happens when amanda has to go back to her old pack to her old fears to her old loneliness well guess what she's pretty and stronger now and max can't have her so  find out if amanda will fall in love with the one she fled from or hold strong and give max a taste of his own medicine

I like the story so far but it would be really good if you could use speech marks.
Needs "  " and the names of the ppl talking that's all I'm concerned about
heCALMmo heCALMmo Jun 14
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Uhmm author hope ur not gonna find this as an offended can u use some pov? Or who's people is talking? Or can u make it bold? Its difficult to figure who's talking.
- - Jun 25, 2015
You have really poor grammar, no offense. Is English your native language or..? It's not inglish, Tyler!
- - Jun 25, 2015
THAT GRAMMAR THOUGHHHH. Way to hook your readers ;) I hope u like mwy bok