Transformation

Transformation

5.1K Reads 183 Votes 18 Part Story
Tanisha By HeartU Updated Jul 29, 2013

Jessie McGrath always knew it would be different after she graduates from high school. Her whole life fully planned out. Happy with her small group of friends and family. She is so excited for the day she leaves high school, far far away. She can beginning her new life. When the day comes it is not what she expected to be. Enemies, friends and people that depend on her. So much responsibility that she had never asked for. Can a girl that lived in the shadows dreaming be able to change a whole planet with confidence. By herself?? When she picks up of her broken heart and life and finally agrees, accepts her life on the planet, complications just starts breaking her even more.    Her old past is about come back to haunt her. Will everything turn out for the best or will everything just tear her apart........ Will she be able to make the transformation?!? Please read to find out!

HeartU HeartU Apr 06, 2012
@live_yuh_life Ok, Thank you. I have changed the title because I kept getting that comment and I agreed with it. Now, the story is called "Transformation!"
live_yuh_life live_yuh_life Apr 05, 2012
You definitely need a new title. I'm not trying to say it's horrible or diss it or anything, but you give away the plot of the story. It takes away all the suspense in the story because everyone knows what's going to happen. I suggest taking another look at it.
HeartU HeartU Apr 01, 2012
@Astridx Thank you so much for ur advice! I agree with you but im unsure on what i should call it. do u have any ideas?
AlexisSims AlexisSims Mar 28, 2012
I think your writing style is humourous and casual and I think your desired audience would find it appealing. I liked the characters descriptions of other characters particularly the cheerleader. Keep on writing.
HeartU HeartU Jan 07, 2012
@kycocobug Surprisingly I hate science fiction too but I have no clue how I wrote this story! lols
criticalthinkings criticalthinkings Dec 17, 2011
I totally understand because everybody on Wattpad writes for fun! We all make mistakes, I just thought you'd appreciate honest and real feedback!