*My twin sister*Brothers conflict

*My twin sister*Brothers conflict

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Ksenija By kiki_kom Completed

Ema Hinata now Asahina,was living with her 13 brothers. One week before her father and Miwa-san's wedding, Ema receive letter thet will change their life. Read and find out what will happen. I'm not good at descriptions.

The story is progressing well, but your use of conjunctions and prepositional words is lacking therefore making the flow of the story choppy and confusing.....
In addition, there are plot holes which make the story confusing and hard to follow.....
How is she her adopted TWIN sister?! I don't get it at all..