The monster mate

The monster mate

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Viancadog8 By Viancadog8 Updated Nov 18, 2015

Natalie was a  adopted child her parents were killed by the shadow pack and her brothers were the alphas of the pack
She just turns seventeen and the only thing she wants is her mate but what will she think when she finds out her mate is part of the pack that killed her biological parents even worse the alpha.
Jayden on the other hand was a ruthless evil leader of the dark shadow pack
Will the moon goddess pair these two together
Will Natalie be able to love a monster

SkyLava SkyLava Dec 19, 2016
It's good but add more punctuation and stuff on 2 speeches you forgot one of the speech marks and keep up the good work, use more interesting words and make sure it makes sense
Aquariosa Aquariosa Apr 20, 2016
You have a lot of run on sentences. Work on the punctuation and add more details with precise wording. Then you'll be good to go. The plot is good, but it needs more work. 👍
beatam_vitam beatam_vitam Sep 05, 2015
I'm sorry,but you really need to edit this mistakes.I wanted to give it a shot,but there's absolutely no chance,for me,to follow what's happening. :)