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The Bad boys baby

The Bad boys baby

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princess6363 By princess6363 Updated Feb 24, 2016

What It can't be why me my life is going to change what am I going to do! Nicole Gullett  is 17 and her friends throw her a surprise birthday party what she didn't know was Joshua McClain the bad boy the player of the school would change her life find out what happens will he stay with her or leave her to be all alone?

Angeline-- Angeline-- Jan 15
No hate at all, but where is all the commas and periods? Not hating, just wondering.
zariajones246 zariajones246 Mar 28, 2016
Why don't you quote what they are saying . Its hard to read .
Gamergirles Gamergirles Mar 18, 2016
So, most of this is a runon sentance. Add some periods in there and it will be better. :)
Jaigra77 Jaigra77 Nov 30, 2015
I agree also you never said that you switched to other female character
corentinhaurd1 corentinhaurd1 Sep 20, 2015
its ok you could improve with the run on sentences and punctuation errors but other than that your good
April_Lake April_Lake Sep 07, 2015
I'm having a hard time liking it when there are so many run on sentences and no punctuation. Maybe go through and edit? I'm sure soooooo many more people would love it. Other than that, it was really good.