Yes, Sir

Yes, Sir

75.6K Reads 373 Votes 7 Part Story
✿Doja ✿ By simply_nymphomaniac Updated Jul 16, 2017

Together we be on a journey. A journey you would never thought of, there will be some bumps on the road on are journey. But I promise this you will love every second of it so now what is your final answer...will you be my subbmissive?

  • bdsm
  • chainsandwhips
  • submission
Mlmelendez Mlmelendez Jul 22
Also don’t forget quotations or to start a new paragraph when someone is speaking!
Mlmelendez Mlmelendez Jul 22
It’s a really good start! Maybe when your editing you could make the sentences less choppy? It’s just a suggestion to make it flow better but your doing great!
Mlmelendez Mlmelendez Jul 22
Be careful with redundancy of scenes so that you don’t loose the readers attention!
Mlmelendez Mlmelendez Jul 22
Don’t forget commas! They tell the reader when to breathe and how the sentence should flow. I know it doesn’t seem important but often little things like that take the reader out of the world you have crafted and that is not ideal so just watch out for that! 🤗