Daniel James is finally home after years in a place that kept him from everything he loved. Without anything to look forward to or any expectations or aspirations, he's in for a surprise when he meets Simon.
I think you did a really good job with the re-write. It also seems like you edited as you went through it, which I enjoy a lot. I do miss the comment about his sister's face as she bought his underwear. I could just picture him picturing it, and the lemon face he probably made!