UNEXPECTED CRIMSOM

UNEXPECTED CRIMSOM

2.7K Reads 57 Votes 14 Part Story
Jim By NightWillG Updated Mar 13, 2011

Klaus is an old powerful vampire that is looking for revenge to the death of his sire but before doing so he must end his last mission with his brother Josahia in a recon mission in a boarding school full of humans where he will meet more than one unexpected problem.

Alice Night is an enigma that he finds interesting and wishes to solve, even if for doing so, he will have to deal with a threatening gothic doll, a pacifist punk and a jealous cat...

Anni_innA Anni_innA Mar 14, 2011
really nice:) i like how you describe everything and the concept is good as well
adrianasntlln adrianasntlln Oct 03, 2010
i agree with @Roisin use " " marks and use commas more often. Other than that this is good!
silversorbet silversorbet Oct 03, 2010
I love your Prologue. It will really keep people reading. Keep working on it!
dneika dneika Sep 27, 2010
Sounds like a good story =D So far, so I will continue to read =D
NightWillG NightWillG Aug 10, 2010
i would love to receive reviews in order to know where to improve. it would help a great deal so please comment!!!!!!!