Stalker Teacher

Stalker Teacher

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RandomP3rson By Randomp3rson Completed

A teacher stalks a student. The student thinks he just weird. What happens when he takes it a step further and kidnaps her. How far will he go to keep her? How will she escape? What will happen with everyone involved?

  • animals
  • cops
  • crazy
  • death
  • friends
  • love
  • random
  • student
  • stupidity
  • teacher
  • wattys2015
AnimeTiger101 AnimeTiger101 Dec 20, 2016
Um it's just my personal preference but writing in past tense is much easier and flows better when telling a story. Try it out, you might learn to love it too. Or not that's totally fine.
AnimeTiger101 AnimeTiger101 Dec 20, 2016
Between out and "I'm you might want to think about adding a "an"
AnimeTiger101 AnimeTiger101 Dec 20, 2016
After " by Terror" put a comma. Then right before you say," yes I love..." you might want to put something like: and I snuggle back saying," yes I love..."
AnimeTiger101 AnimeTiger101 Dec 20, 2016
Should be: Jacob, an awesome cashier at Circle K who graduated last year, questioned.
AnimeTiger101 AnimeTiger101 Dec 20, 2016
I'm not trying to be rude. I'm just doing what you asked by telling you about grammar mistakes. There needs to be a coma between " pants" and " gotta"
AnimeTiger101 AnimeTiger101 Dec 20, 2016
Add is between "he" and "4" also you might want to change "4" to "four". Normally numbers less than fifteen should be spelt out.