So this is my fanfic it still has the same characters but I added me in it so I hope you like it.
I really like it. You put Different perspectives into the book . That's really nice.
But i agree with @jayayay_x
You wrote it in a shitty way... Sometimes idek whos speaking its hard to follow without speech marks, for me.
PUT " in because it's so confusing and you're going from one subject to another and it's annoying